{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"35746350","dateCreated":"1299883427","smartDate":"Mar 11, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"DrTAdkins-Coleman","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/DrTAdkins-Coleman","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1274981715\/DrTAdkins-Coleman-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tlopiekun.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/35746350"},"dateDigested":1532174514,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Review of Draft","description":"In your revision, please consider the thoughtful and useful comments provided by your peers. They are quite competent, so I will not repeat what they have said; I simply will add to it:
\n
\n1. Your unit plan rationale outlines a very engaging, creative, and academically enriching unit. I am excited to see the development of your unit. I appreciate the level of detail and the level of thought reflected in your rationale.
\n
\n2. Your peers provide very useful recommendations that I highly encourage you to consider in the revision. Related to what Paul said naming a specific title for your unit, it would useful to name and explain what the unit is about before you go into why you want to teach it. Also, the second paragraph is very disorganized which makes it difficult to follow. I think I would just start over and decide what you will talk about in each paragraph and move what you have to fit the various sections. Further, while you begin to explore your topic, you also need to explain what English\/language arts skills (i.e., understanding of figurative language, persuasive writing, symbolism) you expect students to acquire during the unit. Finally, you touch on various things, but you need to elaborate and I think once you reorganize the middle of the paper into separate paragraphs, you will see where you can elaborate.
\n
\n3. Your peers provide useful recommendations, so I would revise for the issues they mentioned. As you saw in their comments, you should do another read-through to identify issues with grammar and mechanics.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"35454674","dateCreated":"1299540688","smartDate":"Mar 7, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"pkeene2","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/pkeene2","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tlopiekun.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/35454674"},"dateDigested":1532174514,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"UP Rationale - Paul","description":"Compliments:
\n
\nYour arguments were clear and concise, and I liked particularly that they were supported by practical examples.
\n
\nYou did an excellent job of structuring your argument in a logical way.
\n
\nThe second book seemed an excellent complement to the Scarlet Letter and should provide a solid basis for comparison.
\n
\nSuggestions:
\n
\nI'd expand the argument section quite a bit. You mention how the parents might react negatively to the adultery in the book, but what about the students? I don't think it's something you can downplay in terms of your lessons.
\n
\nYou may want to come right out and say specifically what this unit is titled. To be honest that's what I spent most of my initial reading looking for and it distracted me somewhat from your arguments.
\n
\nCorrections:
\n
\nI'd look for as few areas you could combine sentences and revise them for clarity. A thorough read-through should fix any of them.
\n
\nI'd focus the middle section where you talk about how the unit will tie in to student's lives. You give out numerous examples and it becomes a bit difficult to follow. Maybe separate this section into a few paragraphs?","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"35453580","dateCreated":"1299539482","smartDate":"Mar 7, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"ksadle3","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/ksadle3","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1303079531\/ksadle3-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/tlopiekun.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/35453580"},"dateDigested":1532174514,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Peer Editing","description":"Comments:
\n-I like the young adult novel that you pair the Scarlet Letter with.
\n-I think learning about Muslim culture is extremely relevant and a topic which many students and teachers are ignorant of. I think it is so important because we are at war with a country whose religious beliefs are, for the majority, Muslim.
\n
\nSuggestions:
\n
\nThe concluding paragraph seems like it might belong with the section on cultural relevancy because it discusses culturally relevant pedagogy.
\n
\nCorrections:
\n-Scarlet*
\n-Read & revise because I did see some easily identifiable grammatical errors. I would point them out to you, but I cannot read your paper while writing this new post.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}